critique my web design

god thats bright! even at such a small image size

Wish I could see it larger but:

The image “http://att.macrumors.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=78667&d=1183698807” cannot be displayed, because it contains errors.

So, i dont know wtf that is...

Anyway, it is bright, but maybe thats what they want. Maybe a tad more black, other than the text?

Im not really digging the popout menu whitespace...

Good nonetheless, keep at it.

Quick comment / question on the design.
You show it with the submenu active on mouse event. But when the mouse is 'off' the menu and the submenu does not show ... won't you see this really wide white gap between the menu and the content on the right?

bluetooth said:

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Ya, um. what? Dont bump for the sake of bumpin n grindin'


I think a gap that does nothing for the most part is a waste of useful screen real estate. if you have space for it, shrink or enlarge what you have?

Personally I prefer the first one. The red paint looks a little funny where the hand is on the second washed out one.

Just my 2p worth

bluetooth said:

Sorry about that - I wasn't bumping, I was just having issues with the attachment.

I took a new direction. please see attached and let me know your thoughts.

Two versions. The paint stroke is slightly smaller and a little washed on the right attachment. The paint stroke is a play with the paint on the kids faces etc...thought it made things more "fun" and youth oriented.

thanks,

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I think I like this one more, the only thing is the way you are presenting the proof, with the browser window, reflection, logo, etc actually makes it more difficult to focus on and isolate the design. This makes it a little hard for me to give you feedback ... also you're only showing the top part of the design and it's hard to visualize the rest of the page.

I found the best 'quick' way to present a design to a client is to save the entire design as a JPG, then create a simple HTML file that has the JPG positioned as if it were on a live site and add a background color to match the background color of the design. This way you make it look like a full working website without actually having to code it all out. I then post it on a subfolder / subdomain off of my site (ex: http://www.yoursite.com/yourclient/). I have found this method to really help clients visualize what the site will REALLY look like, versus just having an attachment to an email.

I do like this design over the first one you did. It has a much more contemporary feel to it. It's clean, information is presented in a very easy to find way. I love the use of the large photo - if you have more photos as good as that I would think about using some sort of 'slideshow' to show them off... but use a good one like slideshowpro.net - I've seen my share of cheesy ones.

My only two comments / criticisms are:
1. It's a little "Apple-esque" -- which may not be bad - it's just that it does have a lot of Apple design cues.
2. It could use a little more solid color / stronger color - it's a little washed out looking - with the exception of the photo. Nothing over the top - just something more to ground and balance the design better.

Overall though I really like this direction.