News Report Critique

[kwong2006]

For years, I have relied on all of you to give me an overview of how I did in my videos and reports, and I need your help this time around as well.

I recently made a report on the Iraq War protest, and I was wondering if you can critique it, and sound off on how I did

The report
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Z_yqUI0V9-4&fmt=%2018


Apple Product Pledge Statement
The report is edited using Final Cut Pro 6, the graphics were created using Motion 3, and the Voiceover was recorded on Soundtrack Pro. I am an exclusive user of Apple editing tools.

Many thanks!

[iMacZealot]

Good work! I think you'll make a good journalist. Just some comments:

>The VO was a little too squeaky. Your voice isn't squeaky, but "S" and "Z" sounds were a little too sharp. Do you know what I'm trying to say?
>The bug is inconsistent. Sometimes it's there, sometimes it isn't. Also, sometimes it was a little longer than in other parts of the video. Otherwise, I like the graphics. I like the lower thirds.
>I wouldn't end with "360 News in high definition." I'd just end with 360 News, but I suppose in the real world, that's up to the assignment manager and not the reporter.