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Old Jan 9, 2013, 03:43 PM   #1
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The Waters Echo - A short film based on time travel

This is a short film which I have created for a school course, please give feedback as it helps me to improve in the future.

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Old Jan 9, 2013, 04:55 PM   #2
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I'll watch the rest later but the first thing I would change is DONT USE ZOOM unless it's for a given, dramatic effect.
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Old Jan 9, 2013, 05:13 PM   #3
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I'll watch the rest later but the first thing I would change is DONT USE ZOOM unless it's for a given, dramatic effect.
Which shot are you actually referring to?
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Old Jan 10, 2013, 08:26 AM   #4
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A very ambitious project. Full marks for use of sound and special effects. The rest needs a deeper look. The editing with the dog is clumsy and some of your sky shoots are spoiled by the exposure. The music is more of a Roman Saga epic. Far to overpowering for its contents.
In general you got the making off future film makers. But try and contain the grand o images specially with poster.
The story was well execute but became boring.
Should you decide to do any more time travel formats. Try going back in time?
What about a hiking video with friends and things go wrong etc.
Anyway i bet you hate my input but i have been working on movies a long time and i enjoy talent of your age group thinking big with limited resources.
What editing software did you use?.
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Old Jan 10, 2013, 01:02 PM   #5
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Overall, good go of things. I am just about to start short films myself.
I watched this 3 times and here is what I came up with for feedback.

THE GOOD
•Good job on the masking.
•Color grading gave a good mood but see other comments.

DIRECTING
•The way he picked up the device in the beginning looked weird, who would grab something off the ground like that?
•When the two of them wear the device, they have it around their necks. I could have had them just hold it in their hands.

OTHER
•Dog shot at 1:22 with the zooming has to go. Doesn’t give an effect.
•Continuity error at 5:57 with the chewing gum
•Audio with the wind would need cleaning
•Music levels need to be lower at parts, it detracts from the vocals
•The travel back in time part needs to have flickering light on your actors to mimic their surroundings.
•The zoom at 11:12 is bad
•Did you compress the vocals audio? The after vocals (ADR) you did spiked quite a few times. You need to stop the sound from clipping and then compress it in post.
•The color grade was good but should have been different for the different “TIME” they were in, maybe a cool grade like you have for the past but a slightly warmer grade for the present?
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Old Jan 10, 2013, 02:19 PM   #6
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Good healthy feedbacks makes all the difference.
One thing one can learn and a must in any video profession and that includes amateur.
No matter how much money you spend or time on any project. Editing can make or break your video or film
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