Logo C&C

[r.j.s]

I'm looking for some critique on the logo for my site.

I want to keep it fairly simple and clean, but something about the way it is now seems off.



If you want to see the rest of the site design, here is the link: http://afterthearmy.me

[firedept]

I think it looks fuzzy with the background that is behind it. Background is okay. It is the font and the fx you have applied to it. I think if you went with a lighter colour than the background for the font and reversed your black/white shading it may help. Beveling also need to be smaller. The lighter font on the right side looks better. Just my thoughts.

[r.j.s]

I lightened up the font.

[ytk]

The lone capital “B” looks a little weird to me. It might look better to either make it all lowercase, or use the small caps like in the main title. Hard to say without actually seeing it, though—I could be totally wrong.

[citizenzen]

I'm curious about the tagline, "Because no one can stay forever"

Do you want to stay forever? Do you think the typical user of the site wants to stay forever?

I'm also wondering about starting it with the word "Because". That seems unnecessary. I'm not a wordsmith, but what about ... "No one can stay forever" ... "No one stays forever" ... "No one enlists forever".

Just a couple of thoughts.

[firedept]

Looks much better. You could even add a light gray to the font and it will not hurt it. Not to much though. Definitely stands out now and looks a lot sharper.

[r.j.s]

Originally Posted by ytk

The lone capital “B” looks a little weird to me. It might look better to either make it all lowercase, or use the small caps like in the main title. Hard to say without actually seeing it, though—I could be totally wrong.

Originally Posted by citizenzen

I'm curious about the tagline, "Because no one can stay forever"

Do you want to stay forever? Do you think the typical user of the site wants to stay forever?

I'm also wondering about starting it with the word "Because". That seems unnecessary. I'm not a wordsmith, but what about ... "No one can stay forever" ... "No one stays forever" ... "No one enlists forever".

Just a couple of thoughts.

I dropped the because ...



About the tagline, it's about how everyone's career ends, whether they are ready for it or not, but especially those whom are forced out medically.

[firedept]

Now you have it. it looks great in the site.