Helpful criticism on my movie trailer

Ok so not really a trailer as a teaser I had to make for the Sacramento film festival in order to register. Its not supposed to reveal anything about the story, just give a brief idea about what kind of quality the film with have and show off the main protagonists

before I enter it does anyone have any last minute suggestions (ps i'm entering into the under 18 section aka most are shooting with dslr's/iphones)

Filmed with a Xl1 and edited on a G5 quad in Final cut Express 4

Taken into consideration for the final revision, thanks guys

wonderspark said:

I think you need to set up some drama. I felt no tension. Make it exciting, and draw people in for more!

Here's a trailer I cut for a film that was shot by some of my friends:
College Pranks

Here's another trailer I cut for different film shot by another group of friends:
The School in the Woods

Hopefully the examples help explain.

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Indeed it did