I'm Desperate for Help! (National History Day documentary)

Discussion in 'Community Discussion' started by cslewis, Mar 10, 2006.

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    cslewis

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    Hi all,

    I really need some help. I'm working on a script for my National History Day documentary, and I need the aid of people who are good at writing. Or anyone, as long as they're willing to help out.

    My documentary can be no longer than 10 minutes. It has to relate to a theme (this year's is 'taking a stand in history'), and I have to provide historical analysis of my topic. In case you were curious, my topic is the Scopes Monkey Trial of 1925.

    The whole problem is, my script is 8:45 long. I wanted 2-3 minutes of interviews that I conducted, which means I need to cut off about 30 seconds to a minute from my script.

    In its original form, my script was far more eloquent than it is now. I've simplified and cut out whole paragraphs, but I need some help making it more concise. That's where you guys come in. I feel like a bit of a freeloader, but is there anything I can do to make my script shorter, smarter, and more analytical, but still say everything i'm trying to say?

    Thanks a ton, everyone! MR members rock. :D

     
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    cslewis

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    *centered items are long quotes
     
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    SamIchi

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    Hmm, can I ask people to help me on my 3 Papers due next week?

    Environmental Bio
    Art History II
    Western Civ II

    Thanks guys! :D
     
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    Peyton

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    Yeah, wish I had some help on that LSAT last June:rolleyes:
     
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    homerjward

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    talk faster?
    *ducks*

    but in all seriousness, is this for a contest or just for a class? if it's just for a class or something where you don't have to *exactly* adhere to the rules, going over a bit might not be detrimental. at least, at my school it wouldn't be. i ended up talking for 12 minutes for what was supposed to be a 5-7 min speech last week and still did very well on it, but that particular teacher really likes me...ymmv
     
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    OnceUGoMac

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    That's not a doc script, it's an essay.

    A doc script is basically a treatment, plus a few audio and video cues.
     
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    cslewis

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    This is for a competition. A competition that's on the 18th.

    If you guys want, if I get my movie done on time, i'll post it online.

    Thanks for the help so far, keep it coming!
     

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