Good point. Thank you.rdowns said:I like. I wouldn't use the phrase
"an advanced imaging codec from Apple Computer"
Likely to turn some off, think it won't work with non-Apple PCs etc. I would suggest something like, the industry standard for the fastest loading, highest quality...
I think I am going to remove the light blue block in the middle on the front, you're right it makes it busy and a bit confusing...MagicWok said:First thing I thought, was I wasn't sure where my eye was supposed to go to first on the front.
Perhaps the copy on the back of the post card should go on the front? Being that it explains what the premise is about, the copy for the front card could go on the back, detailing the service.
Just my two cents...
No, that's cool - that's why I posted it. I'm burnt on it and need fresh eyes.MagicWok said:Another really nit-picky thing... the kerning of the 2nd line or the 3rd paragraph: "Our imaging technology..." is a bit strange.
That's me just being me really though lol.
I think I was drawn to the lens first, being that it's almost a solid black circle againt mainly blue
Was about to make this point. Who is your target audience? Speak to them and why they need it.iGary said:Thanks for the capitilaztion comments - I pulled most of this off my "still in development" Web site, so there are a lot of typos, I am sure.
Let me ask everyone something - what is your eye drawn to first?
Would you be likely to at least give this a glimpse if you were a realtor?
To piggy back on that statement, the first thing I thought was about the camera. It really took away from the amazing photos. I didn't even care to read any of what you wrote right away. I would change the little things people mentioned about caps and what not, but I would remove the bit about the camera. Seriously at this point I couldn't care less what kind of camera was on what kind of head because technically, you're not being hired because of what you use, it's how you use it. It sounds a bit rough I guess, but that is how I see it. I would also try and fade the camera a bit. If you are dying to have it there then I would lower opacity to 60-70% and see how that fairs. To me, the camera was the focal point and instead that great room shot should be the focal point. In all honesty, they'll know you'll use a camera of some sorts, why bother showing them too?ATD said:At first glance I thought it was a camera ad. Any way to diminish the camera so people will read it as a service instead of a product at first glance?
Nope, not wrong at all - in fact, I am removing that verbage altogether.Over Achiever said:Forgive me if I'm wrong, but shouldn't it be Canon EOS 20D, not Cannon EOS 20D (above the camera setup). And yes, first glance my eye is drawn to the camera, making me think it's a
Also, the dimensions seem more narrow than what I'm used to getting in the mail. How will it work exactly?
Yup, looked into that. Thanks.tobefirst said:Have you thought about the cost of mailing these in the size you've designed them in? I'm sure you realize that off-sizes are more expensive to mail, but I'd just make sure that there isn't an off-size that would be more cost effective. Having it 1/2" too long might not be worth the extra money it costs to mail these suckers.
Just a thought...
I'm shrinking the camera a bit and increasing the sixe of the "Four-Room Virtual Tours from $99" text.fblack said:I find the front of the card very balanced in its division of visual information. Sometimes that harmony is good. However, on first glance my eye is drawn to the camera and first impression is that its advertising a camera or tripod, not necessarily a service. I think the pictures are very strong, perhaps you could deemphasize the camera/stand on the front of card? I think the size of camera/stand works well on back.
Perhaps instead of "High Quality Four Room QTVR Virtual Tours", just say High Quality Virtual Tours. I know my folks are kind of lowtek and QTVR would confuse them.