be gentle.....

[mocman]

http://att.macrumors.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=70248&stc=1&d=1173983424

a little advice on my logo?? Thanks MC

[Sdashiki]

loose the squeeze, it serves no purpose, even aesthetically, its just unpleasing.

and the "outline" text, not a good idea, it doesnt work well in small sizes.

[shecky]

impossible to read, no hierarchy, poor use of typography.

[mocman]

http://att.macrumors.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=70249&stc=1&d=1173984305

[ATD]

impossible to read, no hierarchy, poor use of typography.

Yes. Think about the logos function before going to it's form. Your graphic is overwhelming the name. The name is hard to read. The type speaks decorative instead of professional.

[TheAnswer]

Look here (http://www.goodlogo.com/top250/) for inspiration and ideas on what makes and breaks a good logo design.

[mustard]

From my experience there are two things I try to accomplish when developing an identity.

1 - Work in only Black and White at a 1in x 1in size
(this is the most rudimentary form the logo would be seen in and must work - then you can expand by adding color, texture, etc. for unique applications as necessary)

2 - The logo must bee simple and recognizable (I personally try to create an identity with the idea that it needs to be simple enough to be drawn in the sand if necessary)

[mocman]

http://att.macrumors.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=70251&stc=1&d=1173988159

[mustard]

What is the pink(?) dot representing - I see a golf ball?

[mustard]

From my experience there are two things I try to accomplish when developing an identity.

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Sorry if this is offensive but here quick example

http://www.graphicair.com/sample.jpg

[mocman]

not a golf ball but a sun without the rays.....

[mustard]

not a golf ball but a sun without the rays.....

I would rethink its placement if it is necessary - the sun cutting thought the horizon is a little odd.

[LeviG]

Personally didnt get what the swoosh and circle represented. I didn't feel they really worked for the intended market.

So I did a quick rejig of one of the later works, note I didn't have the original work so this is more for an idea. I also don't like the squashed text, keep it clean and simple.

Anyway here's my take on your theme.

[mocman]

hey LeviG..... not to bad exept the p does not come down all the way

[LeviG]

As I said it was a quick rejig (meaning not worried if it isn't perfect cos I'm not getting paid for it) and I didn't have the actual work to work from.

You can change yours to look like it if you wish, it only took me a couple of minutes to tweak yours.

[mocman]

yea not knocking yours at all....thanks

[ezekielrage_99]

impossible to read, no hierarchy, poor use of typography.

I tend to agree, needs a different font as well and then it probably would be easier to read.