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HomeingPigeon
Sep 4, 2008, 07:55 PM
http://flickr.com/photos/kermeter/2829502864/

Can you please critique that picture?

Also, I just got a pro flickr account. Now how can i just link the picture image so that it shows up on the forum? Not a link to flickr?



r.j.s
Sep 4, 2008, 07:57 PM
The reflection on the right is distracting, and overall, it feels like it needs something - not sure what, a touch of detail maybe.

TEG
Sep 4, 2008, 07:57 PM
I like it, but I think it would be better served in greyscale.

TEG

HomeingPigeon
Sep 4, 2008, 08:17 PM
TEG: Here is a link to it in Black And White.
http://flickr.com/photos/kermeter/2828719931/

How do you like that one?

r.j.s
Sep 4, 2008, 08:33 PM
TEG: Here is a link to it in Black And White.
http://flickr.com/photos/kermeter/2828719931/

How do you like that one?

Better than the first ... The grayscale gives it that something it needed the first time.

jhamerphoto
Sep 4, 2008, 08:39 PM
You might want to try toning the greyscale image to give it a slight bit of warmth, rather than it being completely colourless.

HomeingPigeon
Sep 4, 2008, 08:49 PM
RJS: What about this?

ipodtoucher
Sep 4, 2008, 08:49 PM
I like the B&W but don't just desaturate... if you have access to PS CS3 then use the B&W adjustment. You can change the light and darkness of the different colors i.e. red, blue, yellow, etc.

But with the B&W it really shows that it wasn't in focus when in was taken. Try again but make sure you focus, maybe on the seam, and try only the left shade and not the extra one in the right...


These are opinions of how I think it would look better so don't kill me hahaha

r.j.s
Sep 4, 2008, 08:55 PM
RJS: What about this?

I like that one.

ipodtoucher
Sep 4, 2008, 09:02 PM
Heres one i took of my crappy ceiling lamp... nothing special just enhanced and added the 'boost color' in iphoto...nothing major

r.j.s
Sep 4, 2008, 09:04 PM
Interesting ... might be better without the hot spot from the bulb, but there is nothing you can really do about that.

ipodtoucher
Sep 4, 2008, 09:06 PM
Interesting ... might be better without the hot spot from the bulb, but there is nothing you can really do about that.

Yes I agree that way there is smoothness of light, but it is nearly impossible to get around that haha

r.j.s
Sep 4, 2008, 09:12 PM
Yes I agree that way there is smoothness of light, but it is nearly impossible to get around that haha

Yeah, that smooth triangle fading into the darkness of the ceiling would be a great abstract, IMO.

jhamerphoto
Sep 4, 2008, 09:28 PM
RJS: What about this?

Much better, I like it.

GoCubsGo
Sep 4, 2008, 09:48 PM
Greyscale and I would like to see a bit cropped from the right and the bottom to keep the aspect constrained. There is something on the right side that just doesn't belong, a reflection perhaps?

ipodtoucher
Sep 4, 2008, 09:56 PM
Yeah, that smooth triangle fading into the darkness of the ceiling would be a great abstract, IMO.

Yeah I'll play around with it. maybe use a smart filter then use like a paint filter and then smudge it!

haha i feel like i'm taking over this thread :o

HomeingPigeon
Sep 5, 2008, 03:22 PM
Greyscale and I would like to see a bit cropped from the right and the bottom to keep the aspect constrained. There is something on the right side that just doesn't belong, a reflection perhaps?

Are you talking to me or the other guy? Because for mine the other part that you are thinking is a reflection is actually another lamp/light just like it.