Abstraction Critique

The reflection on the right is distracting, and overall, it feels like it needs something - not sure what, a touch of detail maybe.

 

I like it, but I think it would be better served in greyscale.

TEG

 

Better than the first ... The grayscale gives it that something it needed the first time.

 

You might want to try toning the greyscale image to give it a slight bit of warmth, rather than it being completely colourless.

 

I like the B&W but don't just desaturate... if you have access to PS CS3 then use the B&W adjustment. You can change the light and darkness of the different colors i.e. red, blue, yellow, etc.

But with the B&W it really shows that it wasn't in focus when in was taken. Try again but make sure you focus, maybe on the seam, and try only the left shade and not the extra one in the right...


These are opinions of how I think it would look better so don't kill me hahaha

 

I like that one.

 

Heres one i took of my crappy ceiling lamp... nothing special just enhanced and added the 'boost color' in iphoto...nothing major

 

Interesting ... might be better without the hot spot from the bulb, but there is nothing you can really do about that.

 

Yes I agree that way there is smoothness of light, but it is nearly impossible to get around that haha

 

Yeah, that smooth triangle fading into the darkness of the ceiling would be a great abstract, IMO.

 

Much better, I like it.

 

Greyscale and I would like to see a bit cropped from the right and the bottom to keep the aspect constrained. There is something on the right side that just doesn't belong, a reflection perhaps?

 

Yeah I'll play around with it. maybe use a smart filter then use like a paint filter and then smudge it!

haha i feel like i'm taking over this thread