I can't speak for the UK style, so everything I say pertain to the US style.
This is
not a CV, first of all. CV is primarily for academia, and usually consist of mostly papers you have published, research in your area. This is a resumé, there are some differences.
In your "Profile", or usually called "Objective", I took the liberty to edit a bit.
<Your title> with <skill useful for the position> looking for <position>. Strengths include proven reliable work ethics, good teamwork skill, <and insert more> demonstrated through previous work experience and activities.
<Your title> is a title for yourself that's relative the position you are looking for. You might have to change it for different position you might be applying. If you can't think of anything too strong, just put Second year Mathematics major student.
<Skill useful for the position> is something that you are good at that's particularly important for this position. General strength not count. For instance, if you are applying to a accounting firm (just an example) and you have a certificate, that's the place to put it.
<position> is where you put specifically what you are looking for. Again if you are applying to a few places, you might consider tailor this too.
-Your exact age is somewhat irrelevant.
-Your resumé isn't meant to be a personal statement. It's a description for yourself, objectively.
In the Education section, you want to be more specific. I don't know what's the grade point average (GPA, a general scale for your academic performances) equivalent in UK, but that'd be useful. If you have any honors from the school, also put it in there. If you have taken any technical courses, or courses that might be of interest to your potential employer, put it in here.
I'd take out the qualification. If useful you can put some important ones in the education section, or later skill section)
Work Experience, you should list your job responsibilities for each position. For instance (also note the format):
Burger King
----------------March 2007 to Present
Crew Member
--------------Irvine, State-equivalent
-Take orders from customer
-Make burger
-Stock inventory
Just examples. I can't see what you did from your description, but you want to outline your responsibilities for while you worked there. Also, is Irvine a city, a town or something? What's the bigger municipal? For instance, in US, I'd put: City, State.
Also you want to have consistent format. Even if you worked for 5 days, you still want to use proper month, year format.
Skill. Maturity is not a skill. that's a characteristics. But you can't put mature because it's too vague. Professional attitude and team work skills are specific enough, but these are still not "skill", they belong at the end of the Objective, if anywhere.
Computer expertise is not specific enough. What do you know about computers, what software do you know how to use? Do you know how to troubleshoot? etc.
Do you speak another language? that's something to put in the skill.
Telephone manner and capacity and enthusiasm for learning are not skills either. They are good personal quality, but not skills.
You might not want to put references in your resumé, but put something like "References available upon request".
I think that's all I have to say for now
, Sorry it's long. It's not as bad as I made it sound, it's good to start building resumé early, and it looks like you have quite some experience.
Oh another thing, try to fit everything in as little number of pages as possible, with regular font size of course, but you can minimize the line space, minimize the page margin.
