Okay, so here's what I've come up with as an outline over the past day or two. I know this is turning more into a general feedback thread on the short film idea itself, but there's still the theme of tolerance in there. I took whooleytoo's idea of tolerance of ideas and kind of worked it into the original outline I had. So, what do you guys think?
Tolerance: Idea that people need to tolerate what the kid has to say; shouldnt just immediately shoot him or anyone else down because of who they are or what their stereotype is portrayed to be
MESSAGE IDEAS
- Kid has a great idea of how to do something better or some way something should be done in the community that would benefit everyone
THREE POSSIBLE OPENINGS
- Kid breaks into radio station, goes into dark studio
- Pulls off blanket covering equipment; blows off dust
- Various shots of kid turning on equipment, things lighting up, on air light comes on
- Kid starts broadcasting by testing microphone
- Cut to shots of people hearing kid
- Opens on man broadcasting in radio station normal broadcast
- Shows kid listening to broadcast
- Kid gets up, split scenes of kid racing to get to studio and man broadcasting audio of broadcast over whole thing
o Kid is racing to get there on bike/foot
- Kid gets to building, runs up stairs and into the building as the audio of the man broadcast draws nearer and nearer
- Kid busts into studio, cuts off broadcast as man basically says what the hell
- Shoves man out of the way, starts to broadcast message
- Cut to shots of people hearing kid
- Combination of both openings?
- Kid breaks in to studio using opening from second opening
- Kid gets into studio, goes into vacant studio adjacent of man broadcasting in live studio
- Kid turns on equipment, takes off blanket intercut w/ shots of man broadcasting and kid doing actions in background
- Kid switches broadcast audio away from mans mic and to his, begins to broadcast
- Man notices that he isnt on air anymore; looks over and sees kid broadcasting
- Man tries to stop kid, but finds that studio door is locked
- Shots of man outside of window trying to get in, pounding on window and possibly calling cops
- Cut to shots of people hearing kid
Idea of audience not being able to hear the message the kid broadcasts, has to figure out what it is from clues as story progresses
- Kid gets in trouble for breaking into the studio and broadcasting the message
- Even though the actual message was good and his intentions were pure, hes still passed off as a delinquent teenager
o Because of this people immediately dismiss what he said without listening to the actual content of the message
- Kid realizes what he did changed nothing, and the very problem he was trying to bring to light still very much exists
o Low point of film, as kid is disappointed in what little his plan accomplished and also whatever trouble he got in with the law
- Some more stuff happens that will translate into
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- Local news station runs story on kid, but points out that his message was a good one
- This leads people to pay attention to the original message, community as a whole realizes theyre guilty of exactly what hes saying in his message
- Community effort to get kid out of whatever trouble he got in w/ law
- Kid realizes that he actually did some good after all
- NON-CHEESY ENDING WHERE MESSAGE CHANGED SOME THINGS, BUT DIDNT MAKE EVERYTHING PERFECT AND AMAZING AND NOW EVERYONE LOVES EACH OTHER
o NON-CHEESY
As you can see, I'm still struggling with some of what will fill up the middle and, of course, the ending. I don't want to go with anything overly cheesy and feel-goody for the ending and that's all I can think of right now.