Band performance reviews. First of many.

Discussion in 'Digital Photography' started by Renderz, Sep 11, 2008.

  1. Renderz macrumors 6502

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    I've just completed the first of many Band reviews from a photographer's perspective. I have a freelance writer on board so that should up new content. The first review is of a London based band Slashed Seat Affair during their video shoot. Let me know you think, suggestions welcome.

    www.terrylee.net/music/ssavideo/

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  2. termina3 macrumors 65816

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    The photography is awesome; the personal close-ups, use of shadow and perspective all combine to give enviable depth.

    Your writing, however, is confusing.

    Aside from the poor grammar (word choice, tense confusion, redundancy), I can't figure out if you're looking to a) teach others how to approach a band shoot, b) self-promote, or c) promote the band. While there's no problem combining those, the essay goes from teaching to self-promotion to band promotion back to self-promotion/editorializing; you're punishing your reader with illogical transitions.

    If your goal is to self-promote (which is fine, and definitely displays business-smarts), clean up the grammar--it makes some cringe to read "I took along my very impressive assistant along."
     

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