Band performance reviews. First of many.

Discussion in 'Digital Photography' started by Renderz, Sep 11, 2008.

  1. Renderz macrumors 6502

    Feb 27, 2004
    I've just completed the first of many Band reviews from a photographer's perspective. I have a freelance writer on board so that should up new content. The first review is of a London based band Slashed Seat Affair during their video shoot. Let me know you think, suggestions welcome.

  2. termina3 macrumors 65816

    Jul 16, 2007
    The photography is awesome; the personal close-ups, use of shadow and perspective all combine to give enviable depth.

    Your writing, however, is confusing.

    Aside from the poor grammar (word choice, tense confusion, redundancy), I can't figure out if you're looking to a) teach others how to approach a band shoot, b) self-promote, or c) promote the band. While there's no problem combining those, the essay goes from teaching to self-promotion to band promotion back to self-promotion/editorializing; you're punishing your reader with illogical transitions.

    If your goal is to self-promote (which is fine, and definitely displays business-smarts), clean up the grammar--it makes some cringe to read "I took along my very impressive assistant along."

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