Check out my new design

Discussion in 'Design and Graphics' started by bntz313, Oct 26, 2008.

  1. bntz313 macrumors 6502

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    It's a sketch that I made tell me what you think.

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  2. LeviG macrumors 65816

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    I'm assuming its meant to be a question mark but it doesn't look like one to me, it looks like a coat hanger with the triangle ripped away :(

    I think its partly due to no circle anywhere (maybe shape the roots to make a virtual circle part of the question mark) and that the top part doesn't look quite right, its too rounded if you get what I mean.

    Other than that it isn't too bad.
     
  3. bntz313 thread starter macrumors 6502

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    Well it is based off helvetica ultra light condensed. As far as the circle I had it in there but just didn't look right.

    Thanks for the reply though
     
  4. wongulous macrumors 6502a

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    What useless critics around these parts.

    I think the design is fantastic. I got that it was a question mark right away. I enjoy the type, it's very.. hearkening to period/Shag/sign painter aesthetic.

    That said, design makes questions grow wild? As wild as a plant's roots? (Aren't those kind of slow and immobile by nature?) Kind of a weak and vague marketing concept and iconic linkage.. but I don't know if that was your doing or not. But the design is lovely.
     
  5. klymr macrumors 65816

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    Agreed. I think the execution is well done, but the concept needs a bit of work. Overall, I believe it's a good start to a great idea. Now, run with it!
     
  6. bntz313 thread starter macrumors 6502

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    This was actually just a sketch I did in my sketch book before class. Then just lived traced it, an messed with the settings. Thats my own graffiti writing font that I'm working on. Was really meant for me as a bkgd.

    But thanks I will work with it and make it better
     
  7. eleven2brett macrumors regular

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    It reminds me of the new HP marketing typeface.
     
  8. MindBrain macrumors regular

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    I like it. Really captures a feel and the typography is done great, fits well. Excellent use of whitespace too

     
  9. bntz313 thread starter macrumors 6502

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    I wanted the question mark to look ripped out of the ground to imply that it is/was growing.

    And you wouldn't rip out a rare/one of a kind plant, but as the text implies they grow wild. There is always going to be questions no matter what. This is what I was thinking and trying to portray.
     
  10. motoxpress macrumors 6502

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    I think there is definitely an idea there. I do like the contrast of the mark against the roots. However, the type for the right side gets lost as it resembles the roots too much and is overwhelmed by the boldness of the mark.

    -mx
     
  11. jv-iphone macrumors newbie

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    I like the font. That would be a cool typeface. Almost like something out of a Tim Burton movie.
     
  12. wongulous macrumors 6502a

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    Lots of root systems grow tubers, and the point to your question mark could simply be wrapped up/sprouting roots from a toober placed slightly underneath the imagined ground level. Maybe that could make the extra bang in typographic communication.
     
  13. timimbo85 macrumors regular

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    I really enjoy the typography on this. The image on the other hand is not so clear. Good start tho. Keep moving forward on it.
    Suggestion: Why dont you try combining the Type with the Graphic element to make it one vertical piece. The 1st line of type has a flat surface and could be used as a ground, maybe ad rootes to the bottom of the text?

    Just a thought, keep it up.
     
  14. stainlessliquid macrumors 68000

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    Then why arent you assuming its meant to be a hanger? If you were able to tell its a question mark without him telling you then I would say it probably looks like one.

    He said it was meant to be ripped from the ground though, and I did not get that impression at all, but question mark was the first thing I thought of.
     
  15. covisio macrumors 6502

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    Is it meant to imply 'with design [ideas] grow wild'?
    If so, would a light bulb be a better subject - you could still do the same root thing at the bottom.
    Bit of a cliché perhaps, but hey, we all have to resort to clichés sometimes:rolleyes:
     
  16. Nicolecat macrumors 6502a

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    I think it's pretty cool. I love the grunge value.

    What if the circle was dangling from one of the roots like it was a beet or something?
     
  17. eggy3 macrumors newbie

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    great concept and typography, but too weak graphically

    I agree that the typography looks awsome, however, in my opinion the question mark needs work done.
    I find it doesn't inspire the idea of growth but rather that of a ripped out/dying plant (didn't you specify you meant to have it look like it was picked form the earth?), maybe the roots shouldn't look so pulled on. Also the overall grimmy look doesn't serve right your roots: they ressemble blood dripping, especially with earth completely black. How about hatching that area rather than the current fill?
    Moreover the top part of the question mark is not really dynamic and seems dragged down, which is a bummer for a growing anything, you might to give it a slanted oval shape like 'O' to give it some movement.
    Hopes this helps!
    É.
     
  18. siorai macrumors 6502

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    This for sure. As it stands, the question mark is incomplete. Which on one hand may be the point as in "questions (ideas) are formed, grown, etc with design." Although overall I don't associate a question mark with ideas as such, but that's just me. I would maybe add a leaf or two on the question mark to signify the growth. Right now it might be seen as a half-formed question that has died, hence ripping it out of the ground.

    The typography is good, but I don't like the "L" in wild. Since it's lower case, there are far too many vertical lines happening especially with the exclamation mark in place. It's on the verge of being confusing as to what the word is at first glance. Wildi? Wildi? Wildl? Oh.. It's Wild! In fact it took me a moment to figure it out because the image doesn't really convey the idea to me as such.
     
  19. bntz313 thread starter macrumors 6502

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    I agree with the L. I'm gonna mess around with this design more when I get the time.

    It looks good in pencil! the grass is shaded nicer. (the design)
     

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