Could you please help me write a short film about insomnia?

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  1. bki122689 macrumors 6502

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    I want to write a short drama/mystery/thriller about a man who suffers from insomnia and through his sleepiness nights, he discovers something and changes as a person. Just an idea. Could you think add to this or give any suggestions?

    Thanks a lot
     
  2. P-Worm macrumors 68020

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    You want us to do all the hard parts of making a screenplay for you? :confused:

    P-Worm
     
  3. -DH macrumors 65816

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    How about a story about a guy who can't sleep at night because he's trying to come up with a script about a guy with insomnia?

    -DH
     
  4. unid macrumors regular

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    So your idea is a drama/mystery/thriller about a male insomniac who makes a discovery...


    In the sprawling village of Acedia, Brian Bland is unable to sleep again, he can only find rest when sitting on his old rocking horse. The next day is his first day of work as a stable hand, but he is struggling with his task of forking manure due to his perpetual hypnoidal apathy. Berated, then sacked by his boss he walks home slowly. On the way he sees a crazed unemployed banker steal a girls toy clown, he becomes enraged and kills him miraculously with his lunchbox. Upon sentencing the judge hears of his insomnia and makes a concession that allows him to take his rocking horse into jail on condition that he never sleeps. After many years Brian discovers a rare woodworm in the horses flank whose frantic wriggling enables him to construct an elaborate hoax declaring discovery of perpetual motion. He becomes notorious, yet on the brink of stardom he becomes infested with the woodworm which puts him in a terminal coma.
     
  5. Consultant macrumors G5

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    Seems like OP has zero ideas and wanted people to do his homework / work for him.

    Next thread: can you please help me shoot a short film?

    And the next: can you please help me edit a short film?

    etc.?
     
  6. unid macrumors regular

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    Right bit of an update

    I've totally got Rob Epstein on board, Hopkins declined the protagonists role unfortunately, but think I've got a location Basingstoke in Hampshire UK seems ideal. I'm suggesting we go with an innovative new dolly system inspired by Herzogs' Little Dieter. Also wondering what that situation is as far as secured funding? Epstein has agreed only if his trailer is a 61' dymaxion.
     
  7. sushi Moderator emeritus

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    I think that the film should focus on a mysterious MacRumors member who posts 24/7 because of his/her insomnia. :p
     
  8. El Cabong macrumors 6502a

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    The film deals with Ralph Roberts, a retired widower who begins to suffer from insomnia. As the condition worsens, he begins to see things that are invisible and intangible to others: colorful manifestations of life-force surrounding people (auras), and diminutive white-coated beings he calls "little bald doctors", based on their appearance. Roberts perceives other planes of reality and their influence upon the "real" world. He finds that his longtime friend, Lois Chasse, is also a sufferer. They eventually discover that their insomnia has in fact been induced by the two little bald doctors to enable them to defeat the agents of the Crimson King.

    Lois and Ralph name the doctors Clotho and Lachesis (the good guys) and Atropos (the rogue doctor), after the Moirae of mythology. Ralph overcomes Atropos and forces him to promise to stay out of their business, the doctors all being bound by their word, but Atropos has his revenge by showing Ralph a glimpse of the not too distant future in which he claims the life of the innocent Natalie Deepneau. Ralph is able to counterbalance this however, by striking a deal with Clotho and Lachesis whereby he trades his own life for Natalie's.

    The story climaxes when Ed Deepneau, a deranged maniac and former neighbor of Roberts and Chasse, under control of an entity called the Crimson King attempts to crash a light plane containing explosives into the Derry Civic Center during a heavily-attended rally. At first Ralph and Lois think Ed's intention is to kill thousands of people in the immediate area; they discover however, that Ed has been possessed by the Random and brainwashed into becoming a kamikaze to help fulfill the Crimson King's true motive. The Crimson King wishes to kill a boy named Patrick Danville. Danville is the focus of a prophecy concerning the salvation of The Dark Tower (and indeed returns with a key role in the seventh book in The Dark Tower series). Danville cannot, for undisclosed reasons, be killed directly by anyone born under either the Random or the Purpose.

    However, from time to time a being is born who is "undesignated". An undesignated person is described as being like a blank card, and is up for grabs by either side. Deepneau is one such person, in fact the only person on earth at that time of undesignated status. Ralph defeats the King and forces the light plane to crash into the parking lot; killing Deepneau and sparing Danville's life, allowing him to fulfill his destiny and setting the path for the Dark Tower series.

    The story ends on a tragic note as Ralph, to uphold his bargain with Clotho and Lachesis, is hit and killed by a car to prevent Natalie Deepneau from being killed in his place. The story closes on the remark that Ralph is finally able to rest.
     
  9. sushi Moderator emeritus

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    Does that mean your suggested theme music will be Moonchild? :D
     
  10. carlgo macrumors 68000

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    She put out candles, cooked a complex dinner and bought an expensive bottle of wine, hoping for an excellent night.

    He drinks all the wine and starts to doze off.

    She wants to talk about their relationship.

    He rolls over and goes to sleep, for the first time in ages.

    When he wakes up, she is gone. There is a note.

    He reads it, obviously not comprehending it. He goes back to sleep.

    Vlad, who looks like Boris Badinoff and is a KGB spy and trained lover, leaves through the back door, silently, leaving no clues. He eats the note and enters the waiting black Mercedes.

    She awakes as if from a dream, not believing how wonderful her night turned out. She calls Vlad, but it is a bad number and a shrewish voice yells at her for calling in the middle of the night.

    She hears the quiet, solid thump of a car door closing and then a soft knock at her door. "God, I hope its Groundhog Day" she says to herself.
     

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