Critique my first design.

Discussion in 'Design and Graphics' started by 66217, Aug 5, 2007.

  1. 66217 Guest

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    So this is the first time I make something serious. I used Illustrator CS3.

    The text is still missing, and also the logo, which is going to be in the top left part. I'll move to the right the text that says "Cuidado de.....".

    As you see, the text is in spanish. But please critique the design.

    Don't hesitate on saying you think it is the worst design ever.:p




    Thanks,


    Roco
     

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  2. Blue Velvet Moderator emeritus

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    Unfortunately, I can't read Spanish. What are you designing it for? What's its purpose?
     
  3. 66217 thread starter Guest

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    Oops, I forgot to write the purpose.

    It is for a Dry Cleaning company. The purpose is to transmit to the client that we have the best service for cleaning and storing wedding dresses. The text that I would put there would say what methods we use, how we pack it, etc.
     
  4. Luis macrumors 65816

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    Did you write the text or did the company give it to you? Since the phrase: "Por eso te ofrecemos el mejor servicio de lavado y empacado garantizado por la calidad" seems a bit wonky...

    Other than that I like the design, however I am no designer...
     
  5. 66217 thread starter Guest

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    I wrote it.:D

    After "Calidad" the name of the company would appear.

    But yes, I agree that it seems a little out of place. I just added some text to see how it would look. It would probably change at the end.
     
  6. Luis macrumors 65816

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    You speak Spanish well!

    Yes, that would pretty much fix it.

    It seems a little out of place now, but if you complete the phrase, it will be ok.
     
  7. bluetooth macrumors 6502a

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    My suggestion is that if your focus or business is on cleaning and/or storing wedding dresses, then perhaps it would be a good idea to place visual emphasis on the actual wedding dress, rather then a head shot with veil.

    Here is an example...

    http://www.weddingdresscleaners.net/

    Other then that, I think it's looking pretty good.
     
  8. 66217 thread starter Guest

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    It is my native language. I'm from Mexico.:)

    Good point.

    What royalty-free company would you recommend? I am using right now the browser that comes with Adobe Bridge, which I find good, but lacks variety.
     
  9. Blue Velvet Moderator emeritus

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    Luis

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    That pretty much explains it then :)
     
  11. hsotnicaM macrumors regular

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    LOL. I guess it's good that you can speak Spanish. Ha!


    The design is simple but there's nothing that stands out as awful. Maybe a few more elements to draw the eye in to the paragraphs - rose petals, veil, pearls, etc.
     

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