Critique my typography poster

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  1. rory.reilly macrumors newbie

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    Hi I created a poster inspired by the Steve Jobs " Here's to the crazy ones" poster. So I tried to create a poster of my own based on a Mark Twain quote. Its definitely not as good as some of the amazing work professional designers create but please bear in mind that i am 13

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  2. YESimBLUNTED macrumors member

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    Very good for your age for sure. Typography is one of the hardest things to do and to do correctly. You have done an excellent job for someone who is only 13. There are a few things that people could bark about, but IMHO, it is excellent for someone your age with probably little to no experience. The only thing that really gets me is the "from the safe harbor" line. Although you handled it pretty well with the thicker font that pulls your eye to the next word (congrats) it is also not a normal way to read things and for a second there I got stuck. Just remember most people read from left to right, up to down and that is the "natural way" we read things. That being said you have already grabbed the eye and guided it with the thicker font, but because it is the ONLY line that is not read this way, it confuses the reader.

    Great job none-the-less! :D
     
  3. Lordskelic macrumors regular

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  4. rory.reilly thread starter macrumors newbie

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    Thanks

    Thanks guys, it is a rough draft and i wanted to get some constructive criticism on it so I could make a few changes. I messed up a bit on the ribbon in the "safe harbor" bit and YESimBLUNTED your point about the natural way of reading is left to right makes total sense and I'll try and rectify that problem.
     
  5. AoxomoxoA macrumors member

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    Also balance... you have a line that need to be adjusted to bisect the text they accentuate (see the SO line) & disappointed should be moved up to center between the banners above & below.

    ...and stop using the fact your 13. Make what you make, take in the comments and learn.
     
  6. tobefirst macrumors 68040

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    Think about the fonts you chose and why you chose them. The first thing I noticed was that there were no serifs, even though this is a quote from an author of books who has been dead over 100 years. Twain's books would likely have been printed with serif fonts as they are typically considered easier to read on paper. They are also *very generally speaking* currently considered older and more classic than sans serifs.
     
  7. andalusia macrumors 68030

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    I think "you will be more" and "by the things you didn't do" should be less bold and noticeable than "DISAPPOINTED". I think disappointed should be a lot stronger as it's the key point to the sentence. Nice work though :) Keep practising!
     
  8. NXTMIKE macrumors 6502

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    The allignment near the bottom seems to be off a bit.

    Other than that, it looks good. Maybe a bit too much leading in between the lines.
     
  9. renaultf1 macrumors newbie

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    I have to agree with this - you did a great job with probably very little experience! YesImBlunted brings up a good point - I too got stuck on the same section "from the safe harbour" - had to read it multiple times before I figured out it was two columns. You might fix it with something as simple as a vertical line between your two stacked columns "from the" | "safe harbour" and lead those lines a little closer together...just my .02. ;)
     
  10. rory.reilly, Jan 4, 2012
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    rory.reilly thread starter macrumors newbie

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    thanks for the criticism im not using my age as a excuse i just believe that it should be taken into account the fact that i have little experience you wouldnt compare a guitar player with years of experience to a beginner.

    I also think that the point about serifs makes A LOT of sense as i took a much more modern look to a traditional classic quote something that i clearly missed

    Another point that i appreciate is the "disappointed" being in bold something i had before but due to having a limited selection of fonts i couldn't find an ideal font to put in bold that would tie in with the overall aesthetic. I will keep looking before creating the finished product
     
  11. ezekielrage_99 macrumors 68040

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    The only thing I would suggest is to pull the kerning in a little tighter and "pull out" the words that really has meaning to the text.


    I'd also suggesting checking here and here for ideas and hints'n'tips if you're interested in type.

    Good luck :cool:
     

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