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  1. fireshot91 macrumors 601

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    What would be a good intro paragraph for a narrative essay that is based on a prompt that says: "describe your first time moving to a new house"
     
  2. chilipie macrumors 6502a

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    I'm sure there'll be people prepared to help you with your work, but they're not just going to do it for you.
     
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    It was the best of times, it was the worst of times.


    Etc.
     
  5. runningman macrumors regular

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    When he was thirteen, my brother Jem got his arm badly broken at the elbow....
     
  6. Demosthenes X macrumors 68000

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    I think you mean, "It was the best of times, it was the blurst of times." :D
     
  7. rdowns macrumors Penryn

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    The fact that the former occupants were brutally murdered mattered not. The speckles of blood on the wall perfectly matched our new couch and the bullet holes lent themselves to our eclectic tastes.
     
  8. SmartIndianKid macrumors regular

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    Atticus! Atticus! (For anyone who has seen the film)

    But on a more on topic note, I doubt the prompt is as literal as you're taking it. Just use as much description as you can.
     
  9. ErikCLDR macrumors 68000

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    I would either start off with the drive to your neighborhood and observing the other houses.

    Or maybe I would talk about the smell of the new house. Every house has a distinct smell, you get used to it unless you go on vacation for a week or more.
     
  10. psycoswimmer macrumors 65816

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    Once upon a time, when I was in fourth grade, we moved into a new house and it was on Newbury Street and I liked it more than my old house, but I still kinda missed my old house, but that's okay. My little sister liked the pizza place by our old house. Anyways, the house, we moved in around November. This was hard for my parents. Because they had to move a lot of stuff. In a truck. I wanted to help but my parents told me that I couldn't help. They always tell me that I'm useless and can't help no matter what. Sometimes I just wish that I would be more appreciated in my house, that I could get praise for my chores. And my good school work. My sister is babied, and gets pizza. So anyways as I was saying, we moved into a house.
     
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    "It is a dark time for the
    Rebellion. Although the Death
    Star has been destroyed,
    Imperial troops have driven the
    Rebel forces from their hidden
    base and pursued them across
    the galaxy.

    Evading the dreaded Imperial
    Starfleet, a group of freedom
    fighters led by fireshot91
    have established a new secret
    base on the remote ice world
    of....fireshot91's house.
     
  13. fireshot91 thread starter macrumors 601

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    I feel so special, I can be in the story!! :p

    lol, I figured it out anyways. No thanks to yall :/
     
  14. Frisco macrumors 68020

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    The day was dank and unappealing. Morning was not smiling with its usual brilliance............
     
  15. nickspohn macrumors 68040

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    Today was the day i decided to change the coordinates of where i preside so i'm moving into a new house with different coordinates.
     
  16. LethalWolfe macrumors G3

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    I am disappointed that the people who responded to this thread didn't do a better job of telling you what it was like the first time you moved into your new house.:cool:


    Lethal
     
  17. runningman macrumors regular

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    Maybe you could do it like the verizon ads if you have the network
     
  18. leishan macrumors 6502

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    :D
     
  19. sushi Moderator emeritus

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    Dang, you beat me to it. :)
     

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