Feed back on my video

[dbl.ceo]

Hey guys been working with this series of "staying creative" and I think this one is my best one yet, my others were a bit messy and just trying to get comfortable with the format what you think

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wuYgUXDTNbw&list=UUVHPiLJ6Q4d2oqLTB3sBK0g&index=1&feature=plcp

 

[daybreak]

Looked at your video. I ask myself who are you trying to target?. Too much jump cut talking. Your presentation needs to capture the attention of the audience.
Good idea but a lots of but.....................

 

[heyimandy]

Your cutting is understandable... it's the classic YouTube cut. I think the content is lacking though to keep your audience. 5 minutes of a talking head is really going to need some humor and excitement. Be more creative... otherwise I think your format is suitable for YouTube.

 

[WRP]

Write a loose script. That type of dialog cutting should be under broll. I assume you did this to get rid of "ums" and "aghs". Some jump cuts are ok but if you can't string together a coherent sentence without needing to edit it, you shouldn't be speaking in front of a camera. I got 45 seconds in and closed the tab.