Feedback on a fashion video?

[acearchie]

I see a lot of technical questions but not much feedback on actual videos!

I shot this a few weeks ago and edited it last night.

Would love some feedback from some fresh eyes.

http://vimeo.com/93094321

Equally, if you have anything you would like me to critique, just let me know.

Cheers!

 

[daybreak]

Well Archie over the years I have seen your work and it is up to production standard regards you making something which is a challenge and you can get your teeth into.
This video to me is just a run of the mill and is very predictable and not your style of keep us interested.
You should be working on some good story video if you are doing this as a hobby?
Too get noticed you need to up your game.
Sorry for those remarks. But that is how I see it.

 

[Unami]

well done!
can't really find anything to critique about it - looks quite professional.

still, some nitpicks:
- i don't like the "light leaks"-effect - it looks pretty generic
- this might be vimeo, but some shots seem to be a bit out of focus
- looks very dslr-like (coarse colours, pixel-sharpness,...)

 

[Meister]

Not from a technical, but an artisitic standpoint I think this was excellent.
What equipment did you use?