First Indesign Project

Discussion in 'Design and Graphics' started by bntz313, Oct 18, 2008.

  1. bntz313 macrumors 6502

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    This was my first indesign project. Tell me what you think.

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  2. creator2456 macrumors 68000

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    The typography in everything can be tightened up quite a bit (kerning in titles, Justification Table for the body - word/letter/character spacing, leading, etc.) That said, this looks like a good first revision for the posters (that is what they are supposed to be?).
     
  3. bntz313 thread starter macrumors 6502

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    Where at, the explain alittle more so I know what your talking about. I know what the terms mean.
     
  4. Yr Blues macrumors 68020

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    Where da negative-space at? :confused:

    I like the illustrations, esp. the 2nd one.
     
  5. Jim Campbell macrumors 6502a

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    Okeydokey ...

    TypeCrit.jpg

    Does that help ...? I like the layout, but a little more attention to the typography will make a huge difference.

    Cheers!

    Jim
     
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  7. Jim Campbell macrumors 6502a

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    As I said, I quite like the layout, and the bright colour scheme is also fine. I notice that some of the "headlines" at the bottom of the page almost completely vanish against the background (so much so that I didn't actually notice that there was text at the bottom of the page I put comments on!).

    Random thought: how does the paragraph text look if you make the white background box -- say -- 25% transparent (ie - 75% opaque)?

    Cheers!

    Jim
     
  8. bntz313 thread starter macrumors 6502

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    These are for print, and that is the bleeding.
     
  9. Jim Campbell macrumors 6502a

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    Who mentioned bleed?

    Cheers

    Jim
     
  10. bntz313 thread starter macrumors 6502

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    you said some of the titles at the bottom blend into the background, but there's no background on these when they print the color will bleed of the page.
     
  11. creator2456 macrumors 68000

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    What he means is that the text color and background color are too similar...they bleed together.

    I would elaborate/demonstrate what I said in the first post if I didn't have to have 4 book cover designs near final for tomorrow. Look back next weekend for an update from me if my schedule permits.
     
  12. sickmacdoc macrumors 68020

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    You might also want to do some proofreading too-- "What causes Gobal warming?" on the second panel comes to mind... :D

    Edit: Nevermind- I guess we are just talking about design, not copy proofing cause there are several more problems there that would need to be fixed before printing... guess it is just the old newletter editor in me coming out- sorry!;)
     
  13. Jim Campbell macrumors 6502a

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    A couple more ...

    TypeCrit2.jpg

    The copy is generally pretty awful, actually, and needs subbing to within an inch of its life. I appreciate that's not a design issue, but it seems a bit pointless to go to all the trouble of getting the design right only for the product to be let down by the content.

    For example:

    "Global warming has been and is being caused due to a various number of factors."

    "Global warming has been, and continues to be, caused by a number of factors."

    "Global warming is basically a change in the climatic conditions of the earth."

    "Global warming is a change in the Earth's climate."

    Or, better still:

    "Global warming, or climate change, is caused by a number of factors."

    There's an awful lot of redundancy and plain bad English in the copy as it stands, not to mention some fairly iffy science. "Internal and external factors"? Surely, this should read "natural and man-made factors" ...?

    Cheers!

    Jim
     
  14. sickmacdoc macrumors 68020

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    Yes, that is where I was going too- editing needs to done not just for spelling but for grammar/content as well- but I'm hoping that the piece was put up here for comments on the design and that the OP is planning to fix the copy at a later point. If not, the copy would indeed (as you mentioned) drag down the whole project. :(

    "This will allow the Earth to replenishes slowly the resource we have already taken from the environment."-- sorry to the OP, but ouch!:(
     

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