starting off with deception is never a way to get a good end result. it just irritates people once they know for sure you lied about it, and makes no one want to help you in any way.
to be honest, both videos are pretty crappy. yours distorts the proportions of the iPhone and makes it look bad, as well as just looking like a concatenated features video (which is exactly what it is). The music choice also isn't great.
As for your friend (who is probably just you with another account and you're furthering your deception by trying to make us think you're finally coming clean, which you think will in turn lead to us giving you more open opinions)... that one is even worse. there's entirely too much flipping back and forth of the video content and all I take from it is that the iPod touch is something that constantly spins around and is likely to fall out of my hand, and for some reason I should apologize for getting it, but it's too late for some unknown reason (because of the horrid song choice). there needs to be more thought put into these videos, instead of just playing with iMovie and trying to take clips, stick them in there, and overlay some music.
