Is it just me...

[Kingsly]

... or does this paragraph not make sense?

CNN.com has an interesting article about the secrecy surrounding the Apple iPhone. What's been remarkable about the iPhone launch is that few accurate details of the phone were leaked prior to the launch. Part of Apple's success in keeping the details under wraps is the 5 month lead-time on the announcement. That being said, their level of secrecy, even with their wireless provider has reached new levels:

I have no idea how to correct it because I cant figure out what MR is trying to say. I do, however, know that that last sentence should read as follows:

That being said, their level of secrecy, even with their wireless provider, has reached new levels:

*Not sure if the first comma is correct either. Could someone with more knowledge of the English language confirm?

 

[jsw]

CNN.com has an interesting article about the secrecy surrounding the Apple iPhone.

Obvious enough.

What's been remarkable about the iPhone launch is that few accurate details of the phone were leaked prior to the launch.

Seems simple, too: even "knowing" it was coming, no one was right about what it would be.

Part of Apple's success in keeping the details under wraps is the 5 month lead-time on the announcement.

The FCC wasn't in a position to leak details or cause them to come out due to the filing process. Had Apple waited until the FCC approved it (i.e. had Apple announced it 5 months from now), details would have been known.

That being said, their level of secrecy, even with their wireless provider has reached new levels:

Yes, it's missing a comma. That's all. The point is that they partnered with others and still maintained tight security.

 

[Grimace]

kingsly, what is that little gold ribbon for under your name? never seen one!

 

[Kingsly]

~snip~

I understand now. IMHO, the article would have been more clear if it read something like this:

CNN.com has an interesting article about the secrecy surrounding the Apple iPhone. What is so remarkable about the iPhone launch is that, despite details that were leaked prior to launch, no one was able to accurately predict the many features of the device. Another facet of Apple's success was their ability to keep the device secret, despite the many partnerships formed with third party companies, and maintaining a 5 month lead-time on the announcement. *insert quoted material here*

...give or take a few changes.

kingsly, what is that little gold ribbon for under your name? never seen one!

It's my grammar nazi party membership ribbon!

(Okay, okay, it's actually a ribbon for winning the MR Apple Ad contest)

 

[Cinematographer]

A remarkable add indeed, Kingsly. Congratulations.