La Tasca Poster (My work)

Discussion in 'Design and Graphics' started by Yizi, Aug 30, 2008.

  1. Yizi macrumors regular

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    Hello,

    It's been few days that i got my iMac and i though i share one of my work's. This one was done in PC but it will show you my skills.

    Simple poster done for Hira Productions, 5 minutes to sketch, 1.5 to design.

    I will upload more of my work that's done by Mac soon.
    Loving my iMac :apple:

    Thanks,
    Yizi
     

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  2. bertpalmer macrumors 6502

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    Nicely done although not sure about the white swirls - I think they could do with some extra work.
     
  3. Yizi thread starter macrumors regular

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    Thanks for the feedback.
     
  4. Jaffa Cake macrumors Core

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    Just a couple of things I spotted, Yizi...

    • It should be 'sportswear', not 'sports ware'.
    • The postcode looks to have an extra pace in it, in between the 2 and the F.
    • I think the '(Manchester)' over the girl's hand needs shifting, as it isn't very legible when placed on the picture.
    • 'San Miguel For Only £2.00' – 'For Only' doesn't need the uppercase.
    • I'd be tempted to maybe make the drinks offer a bit bigger, and drop the more info from this bit – you give a number for information a bit further down, so saying it by the drinks offer seems a bit unnecessary to me.
    • The price of drinks is written as '£2.00', admission a '£5' – they should be the same for consistency.
    • Some spaces in the phone numbers might help – I know when I'm trying to dial a number with no spaces I usually end up losing where I am. :p

    I hope you don't think I'm being picky or owt, but it would be a shame if it were spoilt by a couple of typos and small details.
     
  5. Loge macrumors 68020

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  6. AlexisV macrumors 68000

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    There's no hierarchy of information.

    Everything has the same weighting.

    What's the main message? La Tasca, DJ Hilal, Special Offer or the graphic?

    I like the poster - it's just the typography that's all over the place.

    Make the girl the focus point and enlarge, then rein in all the type. Stick to two weights (bold and book/light) and look at your type sizes.
     
  7. Nicolecat macrumors 6502a

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    I think it's a fantastic start...

    looks like you started to go for very clean and fresh lines...and I agree that the swirls don't really work.

    Maybe some ghosted rings to mimic the circle the girl is inside, in the background...almost unnoticeable, but still there.
    (just an opinion...doesn't mean that's the direction you were taking with it)

    I look forward to seeing what you do with it. :)
     
  8. MagicWok macrumors 6502a

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    Not a bad effort, but there is something off with the type sizes at the bottom of the poster... I can't quite put my finger on it, but it feels like it's not quite there yet. As with others, I mostly have issue with the typography...

    - Try '18 and over' line in a smaller font size.
    - The '@' seems to be floating in the middle of no where.
    - Alignment relationship between 'hot' and 'tasca' is weirding me out too lol :p
    - Try not having manchester type over her hand, the colours used make it hard to read and feels a little sloppy.
    - Do you need the { }??
    - As mentioned, try a bit of management with font sizes for the main information in the lower third. Will help legibility as it's a little hard to read atm.

    Hope this helps ;)
     
  9. IgnatiusTheKing macrumors 68040

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    I like the swirls, but maybe they should be red so they fade into the background a bit. That will also help the text stand out a little more.
     
  10. AlexisV macrumors 68000

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    The swirls are the icing - the typographical cake needs looking at ;)
     
  11. Nicolecat macrumors 6502a

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    swirls...

    could be nice...if they looked a little more less of an afterthought.
    Try integrating more, or drawing a few of your own to closely match the brush set you're using. (since they seem to be a hit) :D
    (...and if that isn't a brush set, then kudos)

    (I suppose this could also be because I've seen this stock image of the girl before...and other similar ones sans the swirls) :p
     

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