Made an iPhone 5s Ad, want feedback!

[Freida]

You are correct, but cut the kid a little slack. He is learning to edit.

The OP needs to understand this post and play by the rules. Try your hand at stuff, but give credit where credit is due.

I don't wanna be too harsh on the kid but I must say that taking footage from Apple and putting it together will work in most scenarios. That is not a skill as you already have very good material that has been edited before.
In terms of your edit, I still think there are things that could be tweaked to lead the audience a bit better.
If you want to get some feedback for editing then get raw footage and edit it yourself and then put it together in a clip. That is the skill that editors need on top of story telling cuts, leading the audience, direction flow etc.

What you did is not that impressive to be honest and most people here would be able to put things together if they had the footage cut from apple already.

Get some stuff of your own or at least edit from raw footage and then coma back and we will gladly give you feedback. This is not very good.

 

[ABC5S]

And at first I thought he took the shots/video himself, and edited it, but just remembered seeing this video with just about the same footage basically. Not good.

 

[iCore24]

Ignore the people bashing you down dude, you got a really good skill here and have a bright future ahead of you! But yea make sure you add the sources because of copyright shenanigans. (I spelt shenanigans right without autocorrect! )

 

[Dave Felix]

Since Apple has only been advertising for the iPhone 5c since its release, I decided to try to make an ad for the iPhone 5s. What do you think? I'm trying to work on my editing skills, and I think this might be the best yet I have done!

Great job!

 

[Warcake]

No offense, but I fail to see how the OP is "good" at editing when he simply took footage that was already edited, jammed it all together and added music.

 

[Aucun Express]

Nice and cute editing
I always like that Apple (and you in this case) is focusing on the product, while so many lame Tech b-sides companies focus on spec sheets and stupid things.
Remember the first ad of the Microsoft Surface tablet? Lots of rocks that had no link whatsoever with the product.

 

[Macdude2010]

You might want to update your description on YouTube acknowledging the copyright holder, otherwise it could get pulled down. I'd also remove the "This is an ad made by MacDude98" from the description, as you don't own the footage. Other than that, decent editing skills.

I didn't watch the video. OP took existing footage and then what?

Why? Did he just splice scenes together like in iMovie? Not interested.

If he shot the thing himself with an iPhone, wrote the dialog, composed and played music I'm interested. Cutting together existing footage worked for Columbia to milk the Three Stooges but today it's boring.

Your title and description is very misleading - the very first thing you need to do is give credit and a disclaimer:

disclaimer : the footage usage is copyrighted by Apple and are not taken by me.

You also need to give credit to the musicians who composed and produce the song used. I'm so put off by your terrible and misleading description as well as you seemingly just passing off people's reaction by saying that you said "editing skills".

15 or not, you've already made the biggest failure in the business. From someone who is a part of the creative industry, this is not something to be taken lightly.

You are down right copying footage and music, spending a few minutes editing it then calling it your own. In a creative world, this is call stealing.

You're not looking for feedback, you're looking for praise - which you might have actually gotten if you had credited the right people, made a disclaimer that it's not your footage, and focus on telling people it's something you pieced together from footage and music you found elsewhere.

You are correct, but cut the kid a little slack. He is learning to edit.

The OP needs to understand this post and play by the rules. Try your hand at stuff, but give credit where credit is due.

I don't wanna be too harsh on the kid but I must say that taking footage from Apple and putting it together will work in most scenarios. That is not a skill as you already have very good material that has been edited before.
In terms of your edit, I still think there are things that could be tweaked to lead the audience a bit better.
If you want to get some feedback for editing then get raw footage and edit it yourself and then put it together in a clip. That is the skill that editors need on top of story telling cuts, leading the audience, direction flow etc.

What you did is not that impressive to be honest and most people here would be able to put things together if they had the footage cut from apple already.

Get some stuff of your own or at least edit from raw footage and then coma back and we will gladly give you feedback. This is not very good.

And at first I thought he took the shots/video himself, and edited it, but just remembered seeing this video with just about the same footage basically. Not good.

No offense, but I fail to see how the OP is "good" at editing when he simply took footage that was already edited, jammed it all together and added music.

Thank you for the feedback, I like getting a mix because it allows me to get the true opinion of people. I added in the credits that were suggested. If you want to see my skills truly in action, this is a video 100% shot and edited by me, I only used music from somewhere else. However, this took much longer, the ad was a fun little thing I did, this I took more seriously.

 

[shenan1982]

Since Apple has only been advertising for the iPhone 5c since its release, I decided to try to make an ad for the iPhone 5s. What do you think? I'm trying to work on my editing skills, and I think this might be the best yet I have done!

Confused here. The footage is Apple's footage from existing ads. The music is Apple's music from existing ads. You created it by piecing together existing ads created by Apple in iMovie, which was designed by Apple to make combining videos into a montage so easy my grandma could do it.

I don't mean to be harsh, but you created nothing here, and you used an app that was designed so that (even a 15 year old) anyone can just "click click done" kinda thing.

 

[Macdude2010]

Confused here. The footage is Apple's footage from existing ads. The music is Apple's music from existing ads. You created it by piecing together existing ads created by Apple in iMovie, which was designed by Apple to make combining videos into a montage so easy my grandma could do it.

I don't mean to be harsh, but you created nothing here, and you used an app that was designed so that (even a 15 year old) anyone can just "click click done" kinda thing.

Look above for something I actually filmed, the ad was just a fun little thing I did.

 

[shenan1982]

Look above for something I actually filmed, the ad was just a fun little thing I did.

I saw. I know, I'm not trying to harp on you, it's just this is what iMovie is for... to turn anyone's clips into great looking movies. ;-)

 

[PNutts]

I spelt shenanigans right without autocorrect!

I voted your comment up for that reason!

 

[Koodauw]

Nice and cute editing
I always like that Apple (and you in this case) is focusing on the product, while so many lame Tech b-sides companies focus on spec sheets and stupid things.
Remember the first ad of the Microsoft Surface tablet? Lots of rocks that had no link whatsoever with the product.

The think different and 1984 ads were they have no links to the actual product were pretty bad as well right?

 

[Carlanga]

Very good 4 stars!
EDIT: nvm I realized you just spliced some official apple ads.

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Thank you for the feedback, I like getting a mix because it allows me to get the true opinion of people. I added in the credits that were suggested. If you want to see my skills truly in action, this is a video 100% shot and edited by me, I only used music from somewhere else. However, this took much longer, the ad was a fun little thing I did, this I took more seriously.

Vid feels too 80-90s to me.

 

[fedecape]

If Apple did not release any ads for the iPhone 5s as you said, where did you get the footage?