new Star Trek Voyager episode. What do you think?

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  1. samxool macrumors member

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    hi, i've written a brief script for a new star trek voyager episode.
    I will submit this soon to a relevant studio to get it commissioned, but thought i should run it past you guys first to get your opinions on if there is anything left to improve it.

    thanks!:D


    Star Trek: Voyager

    Episode: A Bad Day!

    "The Doctor is in Sickbay"

    DOCTOR: I must get that research done on a cure for the Klingon flu!

    "Then the Doctors program malfunctions and he goes on and off line for a few minutes before returning to normal"

    DOCTOR: There is some new research that I must be doing!

    "On the Bridge Capitan Janeway is in command"

    JANEWAY: Mr Paris how far are we away from Borg Space?

    PARIS: At Warp 6.2 we are about 3 days away from Borg Space

    JANEWAY: Fine that will give us enough time to prepare for the Borg!

    CHAKOTAY: I think we are in for a tough few days captain.

    2 HOURS LATER

    “The Doctor calls Chakotay”

    DOCTOR: Sorry to bother you but there something wrong with your medical reports. Please can you come to sickbay.

    CHAKOTAY: But I thought you sorted you my medical reports 3 days ago?

    DOCTOR: Well he have had a few more problems with the computer please can you come to sickbay.

    CHAKOTAY: I am on my way!

    “Chakotay makes his way and enters Sickbay”

    DOCTOR TO THE COMPUTER: Lock all doors and seal this room!

    CHAKOTAY: What the hell…..

    “The Doctor grabs hold of Chakotay and forces him onto a bio-bed where he is strapped in”

    CHAKOTAY: Let me go!

    DOCTOR TO CHAKOTAY: I have been doing some research I have brought you here to show you my results from it. Now I am going to just going to give you a little something!

    CHAKOTAY: What was that?

    DOCTOR: That was just something where you stay awake no matter what happens.

    “The Doctor then takes a look at Chakotay and then goes over to the computer and activates his super- strength”

    DOCTOR: Now we come to the fun part.

    “The Doctor takes his left shoe off”

    DOCTOR: I am now going to show my first result!

    “The Doctor using his super strength picks up his left leg and starts to jerk it about”

    DOCTOR: This is not working. I will have to try harder!

    “He tries harder and rips the leg, bones and skin of his left leg clean off”

    DOCTOR: That was not bad!

    “He then gets his right leg and rips it clean off with his hands!

    “By this stage there was a lot of blood lying around but the Doctor keeps Chakotay alive for the time being”

    CHAKOTAY: You *******?

    DOCTOR: Now for your arms!

    “The Doctor using his super strength picks up his left arm and he rips it clean off”

    DOCTOR: This is better than being on drugs!

    “The Doctor using his super strength picks up his right arm and he rips it clean off”

    DOCTOR: This is just great!

    DOCTOR: Now for his personal area.

    "The Doctor then takes Chakotay’s Trousers and Pants off "

    “Then he asks”

    DOCTOR: Do you want the left ball or the right ball ripping off first?

    CHAKOTAY: ******* *******!

    DOCTOR: Ok then the right ball first!

    “The Doctor starts to shake and pull his right ball”

    DOCTOR: This is tough skin! I will pull harder!

    “The Doctor pulls harder but cannot rip it off so he puts his super strength to full and then 3 minutes later both his balls ripped off his body and into the Doctors hand”

    DOCTOR: Chakotay I hope that was not too painful?

    “Chakotay does not answer”

    Then

    “The Doctor rips his penis clean off”

    Then

    “The Doctor starts to run around sickbay with these things in his hands full of joy and starts to forget about poor old Chakotay who in the mean time dies”

    “He comes back”

    DOCTOR: Oh dear look at all the blood! What am I going to do and just when I wanted to rip his head off to finish things off nicely?

    “Then he gets an idea”

    DOCTOR: I will clean up the body and replace Chakotay with a hologram.

    “He gets to work”

    IN THE FOLLOWING 2 HOURS CHAKOTAY IS REPLACED AND ALL RECORDS ON VOYAGER ARE FALSIFIED AND ALSO HE SORTS OUT THE BODY AND HIS PROGRAME FULLY RETURNS TO NORAMAL AND HE NEVER REMEMBERS WHAT HE DID TO CHAKOTAY

    7 HOURS LATER

    JANEWAY: Neelix what is for dinner?

    NEELIX: Well it was going just going to be one of my normal stews but this afternoon the Doctor came in with all this lovely looking tender meat and he offered it to me.

    JANEWAY: What is this lovely meat called?

    NEELIX: I think the meat is called Sheep’s Head but that does not matter. 50 crew members have had this dish already and there will be enough leftovers for tomorrow.

    JANEWAY: Great I will have some of that then!

    “The crew never knew they had just ate Chakotay “

    THE END
     
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