I attempted it for a while but soon got stuck because I didn't quite know what you were trying to say. Also, without trying to be rude, you might want to completely re-write bits of it. Generally it's a bad idea to write a bio without an introduction. It just needs a few sentences about you generally and maybe a little on why you want to write the bio.Sun Baked said:You'll need somebody with a decent English background to rewrite it and simplify the English.
Right now it's a little tough to read and may include a bit too much information.